二年級(jí)中英文寫作練習(xí)記錄

      本文首發(fā)個(gè)人閱讀公眾號(hào)“童書松明火 ” 

   去年寫過一篇《一年級(jí)小豆包英文作文記錄》，一轉(zhuǎn)眼，又一年過去了，仍然堅(jiān)持在上英文寫作課，加了一門中文寫作課。

    目前觀察下來，第一是結(jié)構(gòu)，第二是動(dòng)詞，第三，需要閱讀導(dǎo)入接駁寫作，第四，唯手熟爾。不過在所有這些之前，是孩子的寫作興趣，因?yàn)橛性S多話要說，所以會(huì)迫不及待地想“刷刷刷”寫出心里的話。

    英文和中文作文要求有相同，也有不同。相同之處，對(duì)于圍繞主題的結(jié)構(gòu)，我們的美國老師與臺(tái)灣老師也許因?yàn)橘Y深教齡的關(guān)系，都有非常明確的邏輯目標(biāo)要求，例如事件的發(fā)展順序，鋪陳順序等等。

   不同之處，二年級(jí)階段，中文作文對(duì)于作文的外皮要求更華麗一些，聲音、顏色、外形都有單獨(dú)的專項(xiàng)練習(xí)作業(yè)。

   虛構(gòu)類故事要求比一年級(jí)的細(xì)節(jié)更豐富，觀點(diǎn)作文老師引入了“奧利奧寫作結(jié)構(gòu)”，支持論據(jù)說明也更加詳實(shí)，也許到三年級(jí)就要求五句話支撐一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)？

Bunny and Fox

    A small brown bunny peeked out of his burrow one summer afternoon. The bunny was feeling very hungry, but there was a fox sitting nearby. “How can I get by that fox?” he wondered.

     He climbed out of the burrow and sneaked to the fox back. He tied a rope’s left side to the fox’s tail and another side to the tree. The bunny go in front of the fox and its face is like he had ill and said:” I had just eating a poisonous grass and if you want to eat me and you can eat me now!”

   So the fox stood up to eat the bunny but he couldn’t because he was been tied to a tree. The bunny yelled:” Hooray! I’ve got the fox!” He eat the carrot which is near the river.

   Suddenly he hears a lion groaning. He was nervous. He thought, there’s a lion near me. So he grambed into the burrow. So the lion eat the fox.

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   Adventure to Pirate Treasures

    “What are you doing?” asked Leo. He saw his small brother Peter put on pirate hat, fake sword, two sticks and grab a pirate flag. ‘I want to find treasure like pirates.” Answered Peter. “But how?” asked Leo again:” We will take our ship!’ answered Peter.

   “Wooooosh!” The west wind’s force blew their ship off and go. Peter was at the front deck looking at the front. Then he look at the map that he hold. Leo was steering the ship. Peter told him go front or back, left or right. Suddenly, “Pip, pip, pip, pip!” The rain began to fall, lightly at first, but then “pip, pip, pip, pip, pip!” The storm stroke the sea and ship. The ship was torn into pieces.

   “Crash!” The shit hit the rock and slowly sink. Leo and Peter quickly leaped off the ship and swim with their fast speed to the rock and climb on to the black rock. Then they look around for things. “Look, there is a boat near the rock and there’s a rope on the boat!” said Peter. “Quick, get the rope!” whispered Leo. The two boys pulled the rope, they jumped into the boat and sailed to a small island nearby.

    “Boing!” The boat crashed onto the island with a booming sound. They wandered around beach and saw something under a pebble is sparkling. “Maybe there is a treasure under that pebble!” So they tugged and tugged until the pebble fell to the sand. A soft pouch fell too. Silver and gold coins spilled across the sand. “Wow, it is Doubleoons! They are pirates treasure, we found it!” yelled Peter. “What a great day!” thought Leo.      

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                             MOLE TOWN        

                                                                                                         Long ago, there was a mole that live with his family, while his brothers were munching chocolate cookies and his sisters were chattering summer camp to the river five miles away. He was dreaming of exciting things: he wanted to be the mole town king.

     Putting on helmet, safety glasses, face mask, and ear protectors, Ruby started digging. Soon, a kitchen with furnace, a living room with light and a bedroom with a soft bed and a pillow were finished! Sipping milk, Ruby groaned: ”Phew, it was a hard work, I need come help!”

     Next morning at breakfast table, Ruby announced his big plan. Bump! Dad’s newspaper dropping to the floor. Mom’s milk splattered onto the table. Brothers stopped crunching their cereals. Sisters’ eyes and mouths were widely open. They all exclaimed: “ That is a perfect idea!”

    They started digging a long deep big tunnel underground. Beam over the rail track, workers hold up the rocks, earth and waters above the tunnels. All the rock and dirt was carried to trucks by convey and belt. At noon, Ruby’s mom brought red-roni pizza and yakult for lunch break. Big bull dozers pushed the rocks and dirt to the ground. Diggers dig the rock and dirt onto big trucks. Big trucks went straight down to the crane. Cranes pulled rocks and dirt to the outside.

     After five years work, they built an exciting mole town. It has a super tall building that rose 911 meters high with fifty elevators, each carries fifteen moles per hour. It had a largest subway underground which carried hundreds of moles and stretched all the way to Dolphin city. They built a lot of mole-seum. It hold the fossils of hundreds of shark, octpus and zebras. On weekends, moles went to the amusement park to sits in the ferris wheel to look down to the mole down. They had a mollywood to make films of mole stars. Nearly 4 million moles live in here! More than 50 million visitors rats, skunks, crickets visited mole town each year. There was even an underground river flowing through the town and tourist zoomed on tour boats!

    Now the mole king Ruby had a new big idea: “Let’s build an airport called mole-port!”

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How to Walk a Squid

   I am a squid walking expert. Today I will share my expertise on how walk a squid.

Step 1:

Find Squid: Squid can be found in the den in the deep, dark sea, in an empty shell, along side a school of fish, in crannies or in shallow water along shoreline.

Rules and Warnings:

1.      Don’t use lasso to catch squid’s arms. Because it can release its arms and escape, so you need to roll the lasso onto the squid mantle.

2.      If the squid spray its secret weapon – the black ink, you need a flashlight to see through and scoop after it. If you are not fast enough you need to prepare a rocket pack to blast off.

3.      Be careful of squid’s long arms. You may easily get tangled!

Step 2: 

You need to prepare a lot of shellfish, snails and crabs for treat. If not, squid will not let you walk him.

Step 3:

Rules and Warnings:

1.      Do not let squid walk across a busy intersection to guide cars, trucks, buses and people. It will get a mess up!

2.      Do not walk over a fire station. Squid need to have wet skin. If he volunteers to put out fire, his skin will get dry and he would not be happy.

3.      Do not let walk by a seafood restaurant. Though he is a perfect chef who can dice carrots, simmer a white sauce and even cook pizza all at once, he will get mad if guests order seafood. He will grab lobster, crab, grouper and moray eel with his wriggling arms and throw them all back to the ocean.

4.      Do not let him walk pass skyscraper. His sucker cups will make windows more dirtier than before if he climbs up tall building to wash windows.

This is my expertise of how to walk a squid.

    中文寫作老師引導(dǎo)的是以事物和事件真實(shí)經(jīng)驗(yàn)為基礎(chǔ)而記錄的專項(xiàng)寫作。首要的是孩子說出內(nèi)心真實(shí)的話，所以到目前為止，我們沒看過任何作文選，因?yàn)榕ν诰騼?nèi)心想法，找到具有五感的詞匯去記錄這些思想，就夠了。

聲音的練習(xí)：

                        我的一天 

     “哈！”我打了一個(gè)哈欠，從床上一股坐了起來。我跑到洗手池旁，“呼”地一下打開了水龍頭，我又跑了一趟，手里拿著一個(gè)干干的毛巾放進(jìn)水里，這下毛巾變的濕淋淋的了。水嘩嘩地流著。我迅速洗臉吃好飯說：“爸爸，你帶我去游泳?！?/p>

     我和爸爸一起砰砰跑出門，進(jìn)了出租車。到了游泳館，我跑到更衣室里，拖鞋敲擊地面發(fā)出嗒！嗒！嗒！的聲音。我飛快地“嗖嗖嗖“換上了游泳服，“咚！咚！咚！”地一聲沖出了更衣室。然后“撲通！”一聲跳到水里。我的雙手用力的劃了起來，大腿擺動(dòng)著。水嘩嘩地打著。我一共游了八圈，下課了，我只好上岸跟著爸爸去跳舞。

    我飛奔進(jìn)舞蹈教室，跳舞老師走到桌子旁，拿起手機(jī)，手指點(diǎn)了一下手機(jī)屏幕。非常有節(jié)奏的舞曲響起?？諝夥路鹪谡饎?dòng)。老師坐在地上，腿生直，“咣當(dāng)咣當(dāng)”地在地上旋轉(zhuǎn)了起來。我們也照著他的樣子。老師簡直像一匹奔騰的野馬。我們也跟著活蹦亂跳。舞蹈教室里出現(xiàn)了很多腳踩地板的聲音“咚咚咚咚”。

    我們都累得筋疲力盡，終于下課了。我走出舞蹈教室，直奔爸爸，然后一起坐地鐵去畫畫。

    今天，老師要我畫一只鴨子在池塘邊嘎嘎叫。鉛筆在紙上發(fā)出“沙沙沙”的聲音。我把畫遞給爸爸時(shí)，他遞給我了一包薯?xiàng)l，我“嘎巴嘎巴”的吃了起來。

    今天真是一個(gè)好日子，因?yàn)橛辛撕芏嗍斋@！

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外形和顏色的練習(xí)    

                      我完美的飛機(jī)

     大家知道我心目中未來飛機(jī)是什么樣的呢？

     首先，氣象雷達(dá)是銀白色的圓盤，在機(jī)頭最前端，給飛行員提供氣象情報(bào)。飛機(jī)頭里的駕駛艙里有圓圓的淡藍(lán)色方向盤，和灰黑色的機(jī)窗。飛機(jī)頂上有一個(gè)防撞燈。它在黑黑的夜晚飛行中，發(fā)出淡黃色的光芒，好像小小的螢火蟲拎著小燈籠在夜里采露水。

      接著，機(jī)身一共有四層，一共有73米長，好像一只會(huì)噴火的恐龍。它有一對(duì)長長的翅膀，單側(cè)有91米。翅膀下面有四個(gè)橙色圓圓的發(fā)動(dòng)機(jī)，有一只大象那么大，每秒比普通飛機(jī)發(fā)動(dòng)機(jī)的轉(zhuǎn)述快五倍。機(jī)艙里有30個(gè)廚房，有500輛深紫色的餐車，像紫水晶一樣，為乘客提供黃燦燦的咖喱豬肉飯、紅通通的意大利面、綠油油的海鮮西蘭花飯。還有棕色的蘋果汁、黃色的橙汁、紅色的西瓜汁，還有苦苦的茶和香濃的咖啡。

    飛機(jī)尾巴上有一個(gè)淡粉紅色的方向舵，一共有41米長，像藍(lán)鯨的尾鰭，插在機(jī)尾上。

     飛機(jī)的肚子下有五個(gè)起落架。當(dāng)飛機(jī)著陸時(shí)，起落架“嗖—”伸了出來，讓飛機(jī)平穩(wěn)地降落跑道上。這樣讓乘客感到很舒服。

     這就是我心中完美的未來飛機(jī)。你們覺得呢？

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味道的練習(xí)：

                    好吃的烤麩                                                                                   

      請(qǐng)問，大家知道烤麩怎么做嗎？

     首先，我們得從菜市場里買回硬邦邦的烤麩?？钧煼椒降模S黃的，像一塊滿身扎滿蜂窩的橡皮。其實(shí)，它是用白白的帶皮面粉搓洗成面筋發(fā)酵，在鍋里，蒸熟再烤干做成的干烤麩。還需要指甲大小的干木耳、像小傘一樣撐開的香菇，和像笛子一樣長長的大蔥。接著，把它們“噼里啪啦”地倒進(jìn)圓底鍋里，用大火“呼呼“地炒起來。

      不一會(huì)兒，香噴噴的美味的烤麩就上桌了。一大碗深咖啡色的烤麩像一個(gè)個(gè)骰子，黑黑的木耳像小船漂浮在湯汁上。一片片大蔥和香菇沉在湯底，像潛水艇一樣躲在湯里。

       一眨眼，我“嗷嗚“一口吃下了一塊軟軟的烤麩，有很多小洞洞，咬在嘴里像彈簧床一樣，很有嚼勁兒。圓圓的木耳嘗起來很柔滑。胖胖的香菇在牙齒間發(fā)出“嘎吱嘎吱”的聲音，特別厚實(shí)。味道咸中帶甜，讓我吃了還想吃。不到一分鐘，我像一只老鷹一樣把碗里的烤麩一掃而光。

      現(xiàn)在你們是不是也口水直流三千尺，也很想來我家吃烤麩呢？