英語寫作---五感描述法進(jìn)階2.0

前文提過用五感來做記敘，但是之前那篇作文使用的描述性詞句還是比較貧乏和單調(diào)。 然后是vipkid L5最后一單元的寫作，又選了記敘你去過印象深刻的地方這一主題。娃盼望直接把以前寫過的印尼交上去被我否決，于是就準(zhǔn)備寫一篇Niagara Falls。 

1. 首先給他拿了本書來看，NG的ladders其中一本。以前看過的where's Niagara falls 看完被我丟加拿大了，所以又找了本新的。 

9級Ladders Social Studies 4: Niagara Falls (on-level)212人有 · 評價(jià)103Anne Goudvis（Author）,Andrew Milson（Author）National Geographic School Pub; 1 edition / 2014-02

2.然后讓他做了一本語法，形容詞。主要是讓他看到形容詞可以有很多種類，比如數(shù)量性狀顏色等等，可選擇性非常大。

3.然后拿出information passages，第一單元的main ideas 和details ，再次強(qiáng)調(diào)details 的重要性。本來想把G2的這一個(gè)單元也一起做掉的，但娃造反，于是只做了G1的

6級Informational Passages for Text Marking Close Reading Grade 186人有 · 評價(jià)36Martin Lee,Marcia Miller 著Scholastic / 2017-01

4.接下來我問他，你覺得寫Niagara Falls，在5感中能用到哪些呀。然后他覺得可以有see，可以有hear可以有touch(feel)。于是我就在他本子上給他分了4個(gè)區(qū)域，讓他再次拿出看完的ladders，把其中寫Niagara Falls他自己想到的和他覺得書里好的相關(guān)詞語放到四個(gè)區(qū)域里。

他寫的 see的相關(guān)詞語是 

1. info系列 largest falls in the world， three falls Horseshoe American Bridal Veil

2. rainbow, wall of water, hundreds of people 

hear的相關(guān)詞語是 roaring, rumbling, roar, train, yell 

feel的相關(guān)詞語是 

感覺 pounding like crazy, excited, glad, awesome sight 

觸覺 soaking wet, feel spray and mist, cooler, fog, giant rain storm 

還有一部分本來想讓他寫一些amazing facts, 他寫在see里頭了。

5. 接下來是繼續(xù)按照beginning, middle, ending寫draft， 并且把他剛才寫下的"好詞"穿插到自己的draft里去。他自己的draft 好像被阿姨丟掉了，依然是放蕩不羈的草稿體，我怕他看不清給他重新抄了一遍。

6. 最后是他的完稿寫作時(shí)間?；舜蠹s45分鐘完成。170多詞。 

My Trip to Niagara Falls 

My name is Peter. This summer I went to Niagara Falls with my mom and my friend. Niagara Falls is the largest water fall in the world. But it's really three water falls, the largest is the Horseshoe Fall, the smaller one is called the American Fall, and the smallest is the Bridal Veil Fall. 

First we took a cruise. We wore red raincoats so that we didn't get soaked. When we went nearer, it was cooler and the fog was thicker, it's like in the middle of a giant rain storm. The roaming water was like 100 trains. When we got off the cruise we were soaking wet. 

Next we went through a cave to Behind the Falls. There was spray and mist everywhere. The water fall was like a wall of water. I also saw a rainbow hanging over the Falls. It was so loud that we had to yell to talk. 

I was very excited to see the awesome sight. Would you like to come to Niagara Falls? 

是不是比之前寫印尼的那篇又有進(jìn)步呢？ "好詞"在英語里也很重要啊。